Saturday, August 18, 2007
Introduction ( by Iqbal and Tian Rui )
Ladies and Gentlemen, a good afternoon to all of you who are present today.Singlish has established itself as a dirty habit which never fails to show whenever we speak. Therefore, should we be able to use it without being frowned upon ?That is the question we all must be wondering about, especially since the government has failed in its many approaches to get us to speak good English. Audience ! i urge you to ' USE YOUR BRAIN, USE YOUR BRAIN LAR! Should singlish be allowed? My awnser is ' Aburden' to a certain degree.
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2 comments:
focused, but a lil informal, yea. but yeap, a thumb uppu. ^^
Intro:
- There is a clear focus.
- The audience is not very clear as he first starts off formally then ends off with a very informal tone and language.
- No thesis statement.
- The whole introduction just sounds like someone ranting.
Body:
Paragraph by cherie:
- Topic sentence is not clear. It goes from bonding to making us feel at home to simple to understand.
- The elaboration is not focused on the topic as the topic is not clear anyway.
- It contains more than one point. Reason above.
- The concluding sentence does not link because there is no topic sentence to link with.
Paragraph 2 [emily]:
- Yes the topic sentence is clear and focused.
- Yes the elaboration is focused on the topic.
- Yes it only has one topic.
- The concuding sentence doesn't really link with the topic statement.
3rd paragraph [audrey]:
- The topic sentence is clear
- The elaboration is not clear and not focused on the topic.
- Yes it contains only one topic.
- It half links with the topic sentence as only the portion which states 'cannot change' is mentioned
By - Group 5
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